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The Rose Ivy Path



While following the sidewalk Lita Rose had always taken, she stopped and glanced into a window. What was inside had not caught her eye, but instead, there in its reflection, she noticed the house she had regularly passed. Today its structure seemed to slump but something more pulled her attention. She lingered for some time and pondered what was different. After, Lita had continued her repeated trail and ended up on the very same side of the road as the house like usual. Instead of walking past she paused, turned, and was once more drawn to the now forgotten house from earlier.



Down an alley, across a lane, lies a small house in the middle of two great buildings. In that house sits a secret that has rested unspoken of for many years.This lingered till the day Lita Rose, an equally forgotten girl, found herself oddly interested by the house.

The same charming beauty of the house remained but something else struck young Lita. There in one of the windows set a single lit candle.She felt something, not fear but something else she could not explain. Lita Rose had observed the house and knew no one had lived there due to the unsafe structure of the house. Wanting to investigate, she took a step. Suddenly under her foot the snap of a twig startled her; she peered down and back up to look at the window. The once burning candle now lay extinguished, lacking evidence of a flame ever existing. Lita's chest jumped and she urged to run but her mind longed for what the house wanted. (To be continued)